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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Transportation
 has an important place for humans because of the increasing population and the decreasing areas in the cities. That's why, almost all governments try to improve their
transportation
 quality.
However
, there are some conflicts between citizens. Some people argue that the development of the new
railway
 lines, while some of them think that the
money
 should spend to improve public transport which is already exist. To start with, the new railways have many advantages
such
 as it provides relatively fast
transportation
 between cities or international.
For example
, people do not travel just in their cities. They
also
 travel to the other cities or other neighbour countries. The public transport is not always adequate to travel with the other countries.
Moreover
, spending a lot of
money
 to build new
railway
 lines can help to increase the number of tourists coming to the country.
This
 encourages the development of the economy and the governments can improve their public transport by
this
 way.
Secondly
, others suppose that the massive amount of
money
 is not necessary to spend for
railway
Suggestion
the railway
railways
.
Instead
 of these railways, the
money
 should be spent for existing
transportation
. Even though the new railways have several benefits, the
money
 amount, which is necessary to construct the new railways, is remarkably high.
Therefore
, the public
transportation
 can be improved with the half amount of
this
money
 comfortably. To give an example, the overwhelming majority of people use the public
transportation
 as statistically so the importance between these
transportation
 types is obviously different. To sum up, there are many advantages of the development the discussed
transportation
 types. Fortunately, generally, while the government interest in the construction of the new
railway
 lines, the municipalities deal with the improvement of the public
transportation
. In my opinion, there is no doubt about the importance of both of them.
In other words
, they should be developed by preventing annuity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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