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In the past, museums stored information about culture and history. However, nowadays this information can be found through the internet and, therefore there is no need for museums. Do you agree or disagree with this view?

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Museums hold historic and cultural importance of the medieval period.
However
, nowadays any
information
 can be obtained from the
internet
.
Internet
Suggestion
The internet
 has changed everybody's life in a drastic way from using it for entertainment to using it to gather
information
 one can find anything and everything on the
internet
.
Nevertheless
, we can replace museums as a source of
information
.
Firstly
,
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 can give us faster results that any
museum
 will give as going to the
museum
 and finding a particular
information
 can take a lot of time.
Secondly
,
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 can give us more elaborate results as the source of
information
 can be vast and from different point of views.
Lastly
, we live in an era where we do not have time to visit the
museum
 to search
information
 about culture or history.
However
,
internet
 sources cannot be trusted fully as we do not know the
information
 is correct or no.Visiting museums help you to closely observe the materials and preserved by them. People who love to gather
information
 by reading books or watching and observing medieval material can visit
museum
Suggestion
the museum
museums
a museum
 and explore. After analysing both the sides of the view I can conclude that
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 can be used to collect
information
 about culture and history, but it cannot replace museums as they hold a very important part in preserving every detail of our culture and history which
internet
 cannot do.
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