Too much money is wasted on repairing old buildings that should be used to knock them down and build new ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays in
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Nowadays, in
most cities, people can see new buildings with new futuristic designs are built. So some argue that,
instead
of maintaining an old building, building a new will prevent spending too much money. In my opinion, I think people should keep some old buildings that are more valuable, But people should
also
start building new ones
First
of all, there are many memorable buildings closely connect with people’s lives that money cannot compensate. Generally, these buildings have many meanings for people in various aspects.
For example
, in a village, there is an old building aged for 100 years. Most people who have grown up in that village might have unforgettable memories with the building. The old building might be the main playground for them when they are young. But if the building was to be destroyed because of financial issue, it will be not only the disappearance of one old house but
also
their valuable memories
Secondly
, some buildings are playing a key role in educating people about the historical fact. If people just remove these buildings because the cost of sustaining the buildings might be too high.
Then
people won't know about the building and the important history behind it.
However
, Newer buildings have better safety records. They are less flammable and
are protected
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protect
from natural elements. New buildings are built with the latest scientific innovations are
protecting
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protected
building during natural disasters.
Furthermore
, new buildings are more secure and use less space than older buildings.
For example
, most of the older buildings like houses have one or two levels above with limited space, while a new building can hold more people in less land space so it will be more efficient. In conclusion newer housing and commercial building are required due to the growing population.
However
, older building with significant historical value should be preserved as it represents the cultural identity of its citizens.
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