You successfully passed a job interview. You are expected to start on November 15, but you will not be available on that date. Task: Write a letter to your new boss, explaining your situation, expressing your concern and suggesting a solution.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
this
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letter finds you well. I am presenting my concern about not being able to start my job on 15 November. At present, I am with my family, dealing with some health problems of my father. He had a car accident
last
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week.
Although
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the situation is not critical, I must support him during his recovery, being the sole heir and only member he can rely on. I am obligated to look after him till he recovers. My father has regained enough strength to look after himself, but he still requires aid for his essential physical workout to regain his muscle strength. The doctor has advised us to keep the rehabilitation program going for at least 4 months. Since it is 10 June today, I doubt I will make it on time to return and start the job on schedule. For that, I would like to propose an idea. As my job title is human resource assistant, I can perform most work tasks and assignments from home, attend meetings, and file reports, which can be done quickly from here.
Although
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it won't be the same as being present at the office, I am ready to accept a pay cut and overtime work during weekends and holidays. I sincerely apologize for the inconvenience and hope
this
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will not affect our relationship. Many thanks for considering my request. Yours faithfully, Paul Siam.

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Task Achievement
The letter presents the situation clearly, but consider adding a more specific proposal with alternative start dates or a timeline.
Coherence and Cohesion
While the logical structure is good, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea more distinctly to enhance clarity.
Positive
The letter has a polite and professional tone, which is suitable for communication with a new boss.
Positive
You expressed your personal circumstances empathetically, which adds depth to your appeal.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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