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Some people believe that teaching children at hime is best for childern develonpment while others thisnk that it is imporatant for children to go to school.

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Some people prefer sending kids to the schools, while others like e-learning programs more. Few students say that using distance learning gives them the flexibility to manage their
time
, so they can do extra activities and spend more valuable
time
 with friends and family, which is
also
 important, Because not only studying is important, children need
time
 to create and improve other abilities and hobbies.
On the other hand
, some people like sending kids to schools more than using e-learning tools due to the fact that types of technologies like, smart phones, laptops, and even surfing the enter net are not affordable for some students, makes distance learning not easy.
also controlling
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Also, controlling
Also controlling
 student’s
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 during lessons, keep their attention with teachers
lead
Suggestion
leads
 some parents to ask reopening schools again. I totally agree with freelance learning, which gives the chance to explore and improve more of the kid’s hobbies and interests while making learning easier and more fun. Doing homework became the best
time
 children can spend not like the past. From my experience as a math teacher, I saw what happened recently during corona virus pandemic, distance learning was a must, that’s why more than 60% of my students were happy and satisfied by keeping them involved in the learning environment. In conclusion, education is one of
children’s basic rights
Suggestion
the children’s basic rights
, they must get it in any available way, the way chosen is not a matter as the gained quality.
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