Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

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Many people believe that

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zoo

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zoos

the zoo

should be closed down as it cruel to keep animals, whereas others believe that

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zoo

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the zoo

is useful to protect

wild life

all living things (except people) that are undomesticated

wildlife

animals. I would argue that caging animals

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are

a good way to protect them from the extinction. One the one hand, some people argue that jailing animals is not a good choice. Keeping animals in the

zoo

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is believe

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is believed

that might

limits

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limit

their freedom. Obviously, they are wild animals and they belong to wild environment where they can freely run, fly or jump and keep them in one limited

place

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and fed by humans is unnatural.

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zoo

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the zoo

is the

place

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where people can

earns

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earn

lots of negative profit. Exhibition and perform to entertain visitors and humans have no right to use animals for entertainment purpose, so that zoos have to close down.

On the other hand

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, I believe that zoos play an important role in protecting wild animals. Nowadays, natural habitats

is being destroyed

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are being destroyed

seriously by

human-being

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a human - being

human - beings

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problem leads animals into a poor situation which is losing their natural home. Zoos are the best

place

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to protect animals from poacher and other threats

such

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as habitat destruction and the urbanization, especially with endangered animals.

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, zoos are

the good

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the best

place

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where people can learn about animals and gain more awareness of

protect

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protecting

the environment from the public. In conclusion, zoos somehow exist some disadvantage and maybe cruel to

animals but

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animals, but

we cannot deny the fact that zoos play an important role in protecting the habitat.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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253 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

animal welfare
conservation
captive breeding
habitat
ethical issues
zoochosis
endangered species
genetic diversity
reintroduction programs
wildlife education
sanctuary
natural living conditions
artificial environments
behavioral enrichment
ecosystem

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Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others however believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both opinions and give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

You were supposed to go on an interview in a few weeks, but you have since found out you cannot go on the date arranged.

A new sports centre has opened in your area. You want to visit the new sports centre and get some information. Write an letter to your friend to invite him/her.

Do children behave better when they are physically punished or rewarded?

Many university students want to learn about different subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others feel it is important to give all their time and attention to studying for their qualification. Discuss both views and give your opinion.