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Some think students must travel to a foreign country in order to learn it's language and customs. Do you agree/disagree?

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Now a day, it’s common for a
student
 to
travel
 abroad for consuming his higher education, as now a day it has become affordable for many families to afford it. Some people believe that for experiencing foreign
culture
student
 needs to
travel
 to that country will some argue it’s not required to
travel
 abroad for learning their
language
 and customs. In my view
student
 should
travel
 to abroad for better experiencing their
culture
 and to learn their
language
. On the one hand, some people believe that it’s not always necessary to
travel
 to that respected
place
 for learning their
language
 and rituals.
Instead
, now a day, it’s easy for them to find couching class near their
place
, where they can brush their
language
 skills. But a problem with the above argument is that they can only master the
language
. If they want to experience their
culture
,
then
 they have to
travel
 to that
place
. That’s enough reason for me to disagree.
On the other hand
, some people argue that
student
 must
travel
 to abroad for learning their rituals.
For instance
, the person who is at that
place
 can better understand their
culture
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 who is in their own country. They can interact with the local people and make new friends for better understanding their customs. Which I think is a major plus point. In conclusion, even though
student
Suggestion
the student
a student
students
 can learn foreign
language
 in their own country. But it’s better for them to
travel
 abroad and experience it with the local people.
Submitted by Ajay Panchani on

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