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Some people believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots, what is your opinion?

#people #jobs #robots
At
present time
Suggestion
the present time
, there have been many intelligent robots that can be able to work as same as humans do.
Although
, some might say that people are into and can be more practical, some argue that a smart invention is totally accurate. I strongly believe that we should
intrigate
make into a whole or make part of a whole
integrate
intrigue
 between humankind and robots because both of them have its pros and cons.
This
 essay will explore the benefits and some drawbacks in following paragraphs. As nowadays there are a number of
artificial
Suggestion
artificially
 intelligent robots involve in many industries for a few advantages. One of these is they provide more accurate and precise processing than human.
For example
, there is a medical robotic machine which helps
pharmacist
Suggestion
the pharmacist
 to prepare the tablets for their patients and the medical errors are rarely found when compared to providing medicine without helping of intelligent
machanical
using (or as if using) mechanisms or tools or devices
mechanical
 inventions.
In contrast
, a person can do some task better than a robotic invention,
such
 as cooking in the high class restaurant as the fantastic meals need to be done by a sophisticated
chief
a professional cook
chef
 who can put and test the best
ingradient
a component of a mixture or compound
ingredient
ingredients
 in a hot pot for their customers.
Nevertheless
, a worker need to get paid for their insurance and other welfares while a robot does not need
anythings
an indefinite thing
anything
 like humans do. To conclude, there are advantages and disadvantages both of these
of
Suggestion
on
 them. A company should wisely make a
dicision
the act of making up your mind about something
decision
decisions
 before choosing and consider which one is more worth or they can apply both of them in order to make more profits.
Moreover
, the most crucial is they can afford it. I believe that the organizations could earn more income if they opt a smart option.
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