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In many countries, traditional food is replaced by international fast food. This has an adverse effect on families, individuals, and society. Do you agree or disagree

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In the modern world, change in eating habits is an issue of concern, because the conventional diet has been replaced by foreign junk cuisine in most of the nation, and
this
 has detrimental effects on family, youngsters and communities. I strongly agree that
this
 replacement has taken place in many cities worldwide and has detrimental effects on the population of a country. Multifarious reasons are associated with the replacement of traditional foodstuff by fast food among a large proportion of people, especially young ones.
First
 and foremost reason is that these days students have to go away from their home town to get higher education and the culture of the new place may be different.
As a result
, students have to follow the new culture and may sometimes have to change their eating habits to stay there.
Thus
, the traditional eatings of the home town are replaced by international ones.
For example
, if a vegetarian person goes abroad for higher studies, where the main meal of the day is non-vegetarian, in that case, it becomes hard for him to follow his traditional foodstuff.
Moreover
, the rise in the junk food industry has not only changed the eating habits of citizens, but
also adversely affect
Suggestion
also adversely affects
 the communities in several ways.
First
, nowadays, in many public and private celebrations, people include snacks and other international cuisines as a part of their main meal, thereby, the significance of cultural meal is eliminated
such
 that the younger generation even has not tasted their traditional diet.
Likewise
, in public celebrations, the menu with different culture's cuisines allow people to explore each other's tradition, which is invisible in these days.
Hence
, the changed diet system leads to cultural loss worldwide. To conclude, it is true that replacing healthy eatables with meal flooded with high calories alter the well-being of human as well as create a danger of cultural identity.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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