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*Some people say that it is possible to tell alot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree/disagree??*

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Appearance speaks volume of an individual.
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 is why some individuals say that
one
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's tradition and behaviour can be deduced from the person's fashion sense. In my opinion, I totally disagree with
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 notion, because there are plethora reasons
one
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 can decide to
dress
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 in a particular manner. To start with, a person might decide to
dress
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 to suit the tribe that he/she loves. Contrary to the belief that
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's dressing depicts
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's
culture
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, the love for a particular
culture
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 could instigate the individual's clothing.
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, people like to
dress
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 comfortably not minding the
culture
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 it represents.
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, I being a
yoruba
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Yoruba
 lady, do not like to wear
yoruba
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Yoruba
 outfits rather, I prefer to remain smartly dressed in gowns.
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,
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's dressing is not a true picture of
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's cultural background. Another point to consider is that, people's dressing might be a result of their location and not their behaviour.
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 implies that individuals in the temperate regions, would uniform
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, and they might tend to behave in an unfriendly manner just because of their environment is making them uneasy.
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,
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 weather sometimes makes
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unwelcoming
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,
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 could make people conclude that these individuals are cruel and not accommodating.
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 inference
is
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is, however
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 a wrong
one
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. In conclusion,
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 some people tend to guess individual's
culture
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 and behaviour from the way they
dress
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,
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 is not always the case. In my view, instances like an individual's
preferences
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preference
 and location might be responsible for their dressings.
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