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Some people think an international car free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution. Others think there are more effective ways do to this. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

#people #car #air #pollution
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Nowadays,
money
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 plays a vital role in the
life
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 of every individual.
Therefore
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, mostly the beginners who studying in the school do not know the value of
money
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 and they do not care about it. The school should teach the students to look after the
money
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 and
this
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 is
also
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 a
life
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 skills to maintain the good
life
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 cycle. I am totally accord with the statement and will shed light on the views in subsequent sections.
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 of all, children get the
money
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 from their parents when they demand and they spend the
money
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 without the necessities because they do not have any idea that how hard it is to earn the
money
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.
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, parents who do not ask their kids, why they need
money
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 or where they want to
spent
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spend
,
also
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 put a bad effect on them. A survey conducted
last
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 year shows that the children who do not face any hard time related financial problem as their families are rich, become useless as well as not successful in their
life
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.
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, starters who do not have skills to save the
money
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 for their future are mostly
give
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given
 up and finish their
life
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’s because they are not used to with financial problem and tackle
such
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 type of conditions.
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, schools have to provide some extra classes regarding the
money
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 in which schools have to teach the newcomers, how to save the
money
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 for their coming
life
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 as well as how to stop the useless expenses. Adding to
next
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, schools have to arrange some kind of seminars to show the beginners that why
money
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 is important for the
life
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 and how to handle the situation if they have a hard time in their
life
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 related to
money
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. A recent studies show that the kids who are encouraged by the schools become more successful in their
life
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 and they are responsible towards their families as well. Some of the parents do not have time to teach them about the financial benefits because they are busy
in
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with
 their own schedule, So they send their kids to the school and the schools have a responsibility to give a lesson to the beginners. After pondering into the lake of discussion, schools have to provide the information towards the students about
money
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 and tell them the necessity and Parents
also
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 have a duty to teach their wards of financ
ial benef
financial assistance in time of need
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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