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Many people say that the only way to guarantee getting a job is to complete a course of university education. Others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work.

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A lot of people believe that having a higher education's degree is fundamental and It can assure found a good
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 for
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's standard of living, while others think that beginning the work after finishing school is beneficial and it is
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 handy to improve or gain
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's an accomplishment of the real world conditions. I partly agree with the idea that the degree of higher education's can guarantee getting a better
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. On the
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 hand, acquiring a degree of the University is the key element for more people. Because, there are numerous jobs are available for university students who are postgraduate or undergraduate.
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, a student of Cambridge University is able to find a better with 96% of a chance. Because, the system of
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 university is based on knowledge base which everyone have to learn it to finish their course and employers are connected and there is a correlation between successful companies and Cambridge University's staff.
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, There is a difference between practice and theory, If we take into consideration the process of working after school like practice, It will be more beneficial for people to save their valuable time from learning theoretically. Because, in order to expand
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's accomplishments via the practice has been claimed by celebrities
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 as Steve Jobs
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 of the worlds richest men in the globe.
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 that, people who started their new business after the school do not have to pay tuition fees, study bills for university staff,
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 they can develop or expand their career or business with these monies. In conclusion, nobody can give you a guarantee to get a good
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, It depends on you how to choose your life path or being an industrious person and I suggest that to follow
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 sentence "The sooner, the better" and it means that starting your own business or
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 at a young age is the route to achieve the success.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • specialized expertise
  • on-the-job training
  • work experience
  • financial independence
  • career growth
  • hands-on experience
  • balanced perspective
  • internships
  • part-time work
  • academic learning
  • vocational training
  • apprenticeships
  • personal circumstances
  • financial constraints
  • career goals
  • individual aptitudes
  • well-paying careers
  • satisfying careers
  • specialized training
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