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SOME PEOPLE SAY BEST WAY TO PROMOTE PUBLIC HEALTH IS TO INCREASE SPORTS FACILITIES DISCUSS THE VIEW AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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In recent
year’s many
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years, many
years many
year many
 people have come up with few new ideas to develop public
health
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.
Other
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Another
such
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 idea is to increase the count of sports facilities, the real question is how effective is
this
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method
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 to the general public
health
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? It
this
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 essay both sides of arguments will be discussed and stake my opinion and give my opinion in the following paragraph with relevant examples.
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, recent survey that included a group of citizens
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 as parents, youngsters in early 20s
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, suggest that increasing the sports clubs is not going to benefit the public
health
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. The reason is, most of them visit clubs at the end of the day after working hours, leisure time or weekends were as in some areas where sports facilities are already located, they have not been used to the fullest,
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 to the poor maintenance.
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, huge geographical countries like India, has never been
easy task
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an easy task
 to establish a sports
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
centres
 in every district. Spending
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 huge amount of money is not worth
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 some portion from the same amount can be invested in educating the citizens for
health
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awareness
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 which is more effective.
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, in parallel with the view that increasing sports facilities to promote public
health
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 has merely
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
 the lifestyle of an individual citizen.
Health
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awareness
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 should start from home.
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, food contributes 80 percentage of one’s
health
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, a proper diet
awareness
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 should be organized through
campaign
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the campaign
 and advertisement marketing.
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, authority should invest bathroom for men and women.
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, adding
extra hour
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an extra hour
extra hours
 on
weekly basis
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a weekly basis
 to the children’s curriculum is most effective
method
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 to improve the cause.
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, senior citizen, stress is a clear and major factor,
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 a major rule for them to get involved in fitness activities from the government can make much difference and regular
health
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 checkup camps for working class people with small clinics in each location is a good
method
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. To conclude, every person is responsible for his own
health
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, so self
awareness
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, proper diet and initiating a step towards
healthy life
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a healthy life
 is a most effective
method
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. In my view, increasing the sports facilities is not a permanent solution for
health
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awareness
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.

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