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Economic progress is one way to measure the success of a country. Some people believe there are other factors. What other facrtors should be considered? Which one do you think is more important than the others?

In recent years, the question of whether the
nation
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's prosperity can be determined by its economic growth has been widely debated. Whilst there are other areas that can be taken into consideration, I firmly believe that economic
progress
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 is the most significant indicator.
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 with,
while
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 a
country
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's success is best measured through its economic strength, additional factors can help provide essential information about a
nation
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's development. As agricultural advancements and the happiness of citizens grow to higher levels, the more successful the
country
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 is.
For example
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, in Bangladesh, even though the
country
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 itself has not built an advanced economy, it has still been considered a prosperous
nation
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due to
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 its sufficient revenue each year,
due to
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 the advanced technology provided for agricultural fields and the high spirits of its residents.
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, I am convinced that economic
progress
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 is a primary factor that indicates the success of a
country
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. By measuring the
progress
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 in the economy, most factors can be known,
such
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 as the level of education, income, and intelligence of citizens.
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, statistics of advancements in the economies of countries worldwide, in the year 2021, showed not only numerous factors associated with it but
also
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 a substantial factor of a
country
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's wealth.
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, the
country
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 should dedicate its efforts to increasing economic
progress
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.
To conclude
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,
although
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 a
nation
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's success can be defined in various ways, I strongly believe that economic
progress
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 is the most decisive one. The more advanced the economy is, the more likely a
country
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 is to become superior.

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Task response
Be sure to answer all parts of the question. List other factors clearly and explain why each one matters. Give a direct view on which factor is more important and why, with a strong reason.
Coherence and cohesion
Put a clear plan for each paragraph. Start with a topic sentence, then add one or two simple reasons or examples, then end with a link to your view. Use simple linking words to show how ideas go together.
Task response
The writer shows a clear view that economic progress is the main factor.
Coherence and cohesion
There is a simple structure with introduction, body and conclusion.
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