Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate. Which do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

Some parents have a rigid thought process, when it comes to school, to think that children purpose is to attend the school, and only gain
education
Suggestion
an education
,
however
, there are people who want their children's school, to be equally entertaining.My personal opinion is that schools should be balanced in terms with education & entertainment.
Hence
, I agree with the schools who will provide the equal attention on both the things.
Firstly
, Schools those are focusing to be more
enterntaining
agreeably diverting
entertaining
,
Accept space
,
will not be
benefical
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
to the students in the long run.Studies have shown, so many Schools who keeps on charging fees, for so many events and programs, in the name of
child's development
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a child's development
the child's development
and grooming of
persoanlity
the complex of all the attributes--behavioral, temperamental, emotional and mental--that characterize a unique individual
personality
, but in reality,
its
it is
it's
a
lucurative
producing a sizeable profit
lucrative
way to earn money from the innocent parents, who work around the clock, for their children.
Also
, many times children get so involved in
such
co-curricular activities, that most of the
curical
of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis
crucial
time, get wasted on
this
rather than on academics, which is
also
an important part of the School's
life
.
On the other hand
, if we look at
those
plural of "this"
these
Schools, which are purely focused on academics and
acheiving
to gain with effort
achieving
good grades,
that is
a whole misconception for many parents. Parents
cant
can not
can't
be limited by just preparing their children to get good grades, by doing so they will
are
Suggestion
be
hampering their social skills, interpersonal and overall personality, which is
also
essential part
Suggestion
an essential part
of their
life
, and which will be useful
in
Suggestion
at
every stage of their
life
, fore.
g
Suggestion
G
If a student who is a rank holder in the class,
however
, not able to speak
infront
Suggestion
in front
of the whole class, during
a
Suggestion
an
inter-school competition. It will damage his confidence, and can lead to many other problems at a later stage. To conclude, equal importance should, be given to both the areas, that are
Education
Suggestion
Educational
and entertainment, to groom the child's overall personality.
Therefore
balanced importance should be given in the educational
instituitions
an organization founded and united for a specific purpose
institutions
institution
.
In addition
, we can
also
see from the thorough studies that
implementiong
apply in a manner consistent with its purpose or design
implementing
such
kind of practice, will mould the child to be
successfull
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
in every situation of his
life
.
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