Some people think that schools have to be more entertaining, while others think that their sole purpose is to educate. Which do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Some parents have a rigid thought process, when it comes to school, to think that children purpose is to attend the school, and only gain

education

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an education

however

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, there are people who want their children's school, to be equally entertaining.My personal opinion is that schools should be balanced in terms with education & entertainment.

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, I agree with the schools who will provide the equal attention on both the things.

Firstly

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, Schools those are focusing to be more

enterntaining

agreeably diverting

entertaining

Accept space

will not be

benefical

promoting or enhancing well-being

beneficial

to the students in the long run.Studies have shown, so many Schools who keeps on charging fees, for so many events and programs, in the name of

child's development

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a child's development

the child's development

and grooming of

persoanlity

the complex of all the attributes--behavioral, temperamental, emotional and mental--that characterize a unique individual

personality

, but in reality,

its

it is

it's

lucurative

producing a sizeable profit

lucrative

way to earn money from the innocent parents, who work around the clock, for their children.

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, many times children get so involved in

such

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co-curricular activities, that most of the

curical

of extreme importance; vital to the resolution of a crisis

crucial

time, get wasted on

this

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rather than on academics, which is

also

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an important part of the School's

life

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On the other hand

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, if we look at

those

plural of "this"

these

Schools, which are purely focused on academics and

acheiving

to gain with effort

achieving

good grades,

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a whole misconception for many parents. Parents

cant

can not

can't

be limited by just preparing their children to get good grades, by doing so they will

are

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hampering their social skills, interpersonal and overall personality, which is

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essential part

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an essential part

of their

life

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, and which will be useful

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every stage of their

life

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, fore.

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If a student who is a rank holder in the class,

however

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, not able to speak

infront

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in front

of the whole class, during

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inter-school competition. It will damage his confidence, and can lead to many other problems at a later stage. To conclude, equal importance should, be given to both the areas, that are

Education

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Educational

and entertainment, to groom the child's overall personality.

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balanced importance should be given in the educational

instituitions

an organization founded and united for a specific purpose

institutions

institution

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, we can

also

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see from the thorough studies that

implementiong

apply in a manner consistent with its purpose or design

implementing

such

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kind of practice, will mould the child to be

successfull

having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome

successful

in every situation of his

life

Use synonyms

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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345 words

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