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Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to change our character traits. To what extent do you agree?

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Person innate characters are resultant of genes and cannot do anything to alter. I disagree with the statement because there are ways to change the aspects of an individual by proper mentoring and influence of the surroundings. Since, the attributes of a human can be inherent but there is the possibility to adapt other traits by proper mentoring.Nowadays there are various platforms where they offer different courses to change the character of a person through keen analyses of their abilities and assisting them with suitable mentor, who guide them to incorporate the new trait. To illustrate
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recently a new programme has launched on YouTube, named Mindvalley, which helps several people to develop new aspects in their lives by assigning them with tutors.
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, human's natural behaviours are not constant, they are greatly influenced by the surrounding. Though genes are responsible for the initial temperament of an individual, but these are greatly changed by the environment and surrounding people in where they grow. To illustrate, Oxford university conducted experiments on 100 students by keeping them in a happy and convivial environment, who are reserved in character by birth. Out of 100, 70 students have changed their behaviour by learning happiness in life and adopted the ability to express their feelings well. In conclusion, the traits of a human can be hereditary, but suitable guidance and environment affects the characters that they have had. In my opinion, nothing can be constant everything can be altered with determination and by focusing on what to change.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predetermined
  • character traits
  • genetic influence
  • environmental factors
  • personality development
  • upbringing
  • foundation
  • evolution of traits
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