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In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion on this?

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There are a number of places where American youngsters are prevented from leaving their homes after dark unless they are supervised by a grown-up. I personally agree that young people should be restricted from leaving their homes for various reasons. Curfews are necessary for every place to ensure the safety of youngsters. If teenagers leave their doors at midnight and go to areas where there are many crimes, they will be in danger.
This
 is due to their lack of knowledge on how to protect themselves from unforeseen
circumtances
your overall circumstances or condition in life (including everything that happens to you)
circumstances
.
Moreover
, teenagers might become involved in crime because they are influenced by bad company. It is advisable that guardians accompany the teenagers when they leave their homes. If the crime rates are high in a certain area, it shows that there is a lack of understanding of the importance of education.
As a result
, they will end up as uneducated and unemployed individuals which leads them to commit crimes. In
such
 situations, it may be necessary to impose a curfew. There is an opinion that curfews should not be imposed to adolescents. A study has shown that there is a need to allow
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being one more than one
two
 children to have to have more freedom and avoid restrictions
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 their activities.
Furthermore
, parents need to be informed on the whereabouts of their children. With constant reminders and advice from parents, children will understand that it is their responsibility to look after themselves when they are away from their families. To sum up, a curfew is imposed on teenagers to ensure their well-beings are taken care of. Parents should spend time and energy to educate their children on how to keep themselves away from any danger. For safety reasons, teenagers should be restricted from going out at night.
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