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Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines does this develoment has more advantages or disadvantaged.

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Man is dwelling animal and has achieved a lot in the past, especially in the field of machinery. Many house chores that used to be completed using the hands are now done employing gadgets. While there are potential drawbacks of
this
 situation, I would argue that it is largely beneficial development. Admittedly,
technology
 has made our life easier. To be more specific, with the help of electronic gadgets we can accomplish the tasks at home with more convenience and efficiently.
For example
, cooking, cleaning, and many other similar tasks can be done in less time.
Thus
, the
technology
 has assisted mankind to facilitate them.
Moreover
, the new equipment has enabled us to perform work with much accuracy.
For instance
, drilling the nails in the walls is now much more accurate and with tidiness, it is all possible due to technological advancement.
Conversely
,
technology
 exists to minimize loop of working and give "Comfortline" to humans, but the question arises, what are we up to? Is
this
 advancement of
technology
 leads to shinning future or endangering one? To mention the disadvantages, the primary one is the artificial flavour in the eatables. Because of the packaged meal and quick recipes, people prefer to eat artificial meal rather than cooking meals in the traditional way,
this
 has led to eradication of natural taste of handmade food. To illustrate, tinned food is highly differs in taste from the food cooked at home.
Furthermore
, leaving everything on machines encourages people to choose sedentary lifestyle.
As a result
, it is causing many negative health implications for people.
Hence
, the use of
technology
 should be limited, for not to cause the negative health effects. In conclusion,
although
 there are certain drawback associated with the people dependent on artificial intelligence for household work, yet I believe that the albeit equipment made our life easier in many ways.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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