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foreign films and the effects it could have on a country's culture. I had to discuss both the views and give my opinion.

#films #effects #country #culture
Increasing globalization brings many things, including foreign film from the makers country's to our screen. Some people think
this
 is a positive development because people will learn new vocabulary and
language
.
However
, I believe that regularly watching foreign movies will bring more negative impacts on
one
's
culture
 as people will slowly start forgetting their values and begin adapting the
culture
, which not belongs to them. On the
one
 hand, movies from all over the world depict the unique
culture
, behaviour, and attitude toward life. Many people advocate that watching a foreign
language
 movie will help a person learn that
language
 and create a multicultural and multilingual society.
However
, I believe learning a new
language
 is a concise term benefit and slowly and gradually, without realizing
one
 is losing their native
language
,
Accept space
,
culture
, and values. Eventually, these foreign movies and programs will be responsible for losing nations' identity.
For example
, India has planned and invades their
culture
 and customs by telecasting their movie to the Pakistani audience.
As a result
, after 20 years of watching and listening to Hindu mythological songs, Pakistani Muslim child can sing Hindu religion songs very well, which is the quiet a worrisome and a dilemma for Pakistani Muslim parents. Indians Government officials claimed on many occasions that they wanted to invade their
culture
 among the young Pakistani generation; thereby, they defeat them not by weapon by their traditions.
On the other hand
, foreign movies snatched away the receptive nation's
culture
 from their dweller slowly. Many western movies are based on the girl and a boy living relationship without wedlock, easy divorce, which are completely prohibited in many religions around the world, particularly among Muslims
.
Accept space
.
As a result
, after watching
such
 bold subject-based movies, children disobey their parent's learnings and eventually follow the western
culture
, which is unacceptable. The western media are selling their films to the Muslim nations for earning money despite realizing that they are killing the buyer's countries' future generation at the cost of their frivolous interest and monetary gain.
Therefore
, I am entirely against the telecasting of foreign movies because
this
 will misguide our young and fragile brains and take adolescents away from their native
culture
 and tradition. Ultimately, despite having some benefits from watching foreign movies like
one
 can learn a new
language
, the drawbacks are far more severe and long lasting;
therefore
, I agree that these non-native movies can destroy
one
's
culture
 following a generation.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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