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discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country.

#country
Nowadays, the number of people who leave their countries to find a better
job
 or study are growing.
Such
 a phenomenon generates a great deal of debate among people.
This
 essay carried out an investigation into both merits and demerits of going to live in another
country
. Looking at the issue from a positive perspective, it has benefits for people who are not able to find a
job
 where they live. There are many reasons that stimulate people to move abroad, the most important of which is unemployment. Young people, most of whom are educated, are not possessed an appropriate
job
 opportunity. The
next
 mentionable point of advantage is increasing your knowledge. Living in
new atmosphere
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the new atmosphere
a new atmosphere
 with people whose culture is completely different has an effect on
awareness
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the awareness
 of emigrants. In fact, owing to personal link to the culture of
specific
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a specific country
specific countries
the specific country
country
, some people choose them for
living
the act of departing
leaving
.
However
, living in a foreign
country
 has two salient downsides. The problem in communicating is considered as the
first
 issue. There are so many limitations,
for instance
, language barrier, cultural differences, etc., that caused many communicated problems for people who immigrate to another
country
.
This
 situation provokes some worries
such
 as homesickness or
sense
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a sense
 of isolation. Another detrimental side could be difficulty in starting from zero. That
people
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person
 who
move
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moves
 to another
country
 cannot give high level jobs has resulted in people's facing monetary problems.
For example
, they have to share their houses and live with very basic facilities. To conclude, the limitation in communication and financial problems along with finding a new
job
 and increasing your knowledge about different cultures can be noticed as the vices and virtues, respectively. Altogether, going to another
country
 is unavoidable and the rate of emigration around the world is increasing.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • quality education
  • high standard of living
  • diverse cultures
  • strong healthcare system
  • career advancement
  • safe and stable environment
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