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In many countries, people in big cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large, extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

In
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 contemporary world, many developed cities have occupants either living by themselves or together in small numbers.In my opinion
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 is a desirable state, and
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 essay will explain reasons why it is more preferable.
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there isn't enough
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 in the urban areas.More individuals flood to the cities for jobs and education, that it gets over populated.If new residents arrive to metropolitan areas, the
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 dwellers have to compensate with the shrinking
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 available for them to be free in.That being said, if there was a big family, the
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 available in the cities residential area won't be enough.An example of
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 is seen in Mumbai, where a dozen relatives cram into a single room to sleep in. These pupils live in constant claustrophobia.
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, the cost of living in urban residential areas is exorbitant.If the person is struggling to take care of him/herself in the
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, imagine the cost of a large family.
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 is evidenced by workers in Tokyo who live alone during the week in the
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 and return to their village on weekends to their whole family to save money. Living in solitary in an urban environment
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also have
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 lifestyle perks.The individual will not be limited by their family members on their activities during their leisure time.They can take full advantage of what the
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 has to offer.
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, they can go to the movies anytime they want without informing any significant others.
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 makes staying alone, more enjoyable. In conclusion, I firmly believe that living in small numbers or alone is beneficial over living in large groups because not only it saves
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 and money, but allows more freedom.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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