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Other people think that, in today's world, subject like Science and Technology are more important than History. Disucss both these views and give your opinion

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Nowadays, we cannot imagine our life without Science and Technology. There is another group of people who thinks that the
History
 is more important than Technologies or Science. In
this
 essay I will discuss about both these views. In my opinion, I think that the main subject in todays life is Science. Our world has a lot of achievements in medicine, astronomy and etc. I hardly believe, that these days, with Science help we can save more people than ever. Now we have more understanding about diseases and
also
 with Science help we know how to fight with these diseases. The Science is significant, because with the new discoveries and searches we are developing as a humanity. In my view, I think, that the technologies is integrated together with Science. New technologies are helping to implement Science achievements. Nowadays, young people and grand companies cannot imagine life without computer, smart phone or tabloids. We are living in the technology era. From my own opinion, I think that the technologies helps us to save time.
also
Suggestion
Also
 with their help we are avoiding mistakes.
On the other hand
, I think, that the
History
 is important too. All educated people should know a ordinary
History
 about his own country or family.
Moreover
, I think, that the
history
 showed a main idea in medicine and technologies. In conclusion, I think that the technologies and Science are the main subjects in nowadays smart world. Science and technologies have a very high power, but I think, that the
History
 is important as well.
History
 is a pioneer of all.
Submitted by Renata Pajadiene on

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