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Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have a healthy diet. Do agree or disagree?

#meat #diet
Vegeterianism
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Vegetarianism
becomes
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is becoming
 more and more popular
at
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as
 many people in countries, because they thick that
meat
 is harmful to their body. In my opinion, I strongly believe that it is not essential for people to be a vegetarian. There
are
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is
 some reason why
meat
 plays a role in the life. The
first
 reason is that
meat
 contains a large amount of rich source. As a
reasearch
a scientist who devotes himself to doing research
researcher
research
,
meat supplies protein which
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the meat supplies protein, which
the meat supplies protein which
 helps to build muscles and bones. While the vegetarians consume supplements and vegetables to get all the necessary vitamins and minerals, eating
meat
 is the fundamental way to help people to charge the power.
On the other hand
, using
meat
an amphetamine derivative (trade name Methedrine) used in the form of a crystalline hydrochloride; used as a stimulant to the nervous system and as an appetite suppressant
meth
 is the habit originating from our
ansectors
someone from whom you are descended (but usually more remote than a grandparent)
ancestors
 for
thounsands
the cardinal number that is the product of 10 and 100
thousands
thousand's
thousand
 of years.
Besides
 picking the fruits, they hunted the animals and killed them to eat
meat
, so we could not ignore and abandon the true rule. It is not to say that
meat
 is a reason causing some people’s health problems.
For example
, consuming too much
meat
 leading to people would meet the variety of diseases
such
 as diabetes, obesity, cardiovascular and even cancer.
However
, facing to these predicaments, we can limit the figure for the
meat
 eating
everyday
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every day
 and combine with others green foods without having diet completely. To sum up, I do not agree that everyone should become to the vegetarian diet.
Although
 the
overconsumption
 of
meat
 could risk for the health, eating a well balanced between
meat
 and vegetable would bring the positive result in a
health
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healthy
healthier
 body.
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