Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion?

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From many decades, people are having discussion on gender-equality, many people say, there is no difference between males and females,

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ladies must have the freedom to choose the type of job to do according to their taste, but many oppositions claim, there is huge difference between the skills of girls and boys which leave less options of work for women. I firmly believe that some sort of works are more challenging for ladies owing to the requirement of physical strength, but it does not mean they are less superior than the gents.

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, females are mentally stronger than males; ladies can handle the pressure of number of works at one time,

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we can see more than 75% females are managing their office, home and children at one time which is not possible for men, according to survey, fewer proportion of men are handling their home chores and professional life together, they cannot handle lots off endeavor at one time as it affects to their concentration.

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, big organizations prefer to hire girls for their reception and the reason behind is their appearance, even men find more presentable and attractive to females.

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, in showrooms and events we can see more girl staff than boys.

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, in many companies, there is no space for women as their physical effort is involved,

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, mining companies, they do not hire to females, because of the huge involvement of physical effort. Factories and industries are

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selective to hire, they pay weight age to males over females during recruitment. Most of the stage females have to postpone their plans owing to menstruation or pregnancy. Numerous employers do not afford to run a recruitment after a year, they seek for long term employee, and

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, they give preference to boys. In the nutshell, I reiterate, women are strong in mental factor, but on the other side, they are losing many fields to work owing to their physical strength, but it does not depict they are lesser than males. Both the genders are having their own fields according to their skills and abilities.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

350 words

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