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People should follow the customs and tradition when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that the respectable customs and traditions should be pleasantly achieved the profound following and understanding from people who start to enter a new life in a completely new
country
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. Personally, I absolutely agree with
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 idea with no doubt. Imaginably, people will get a huge of troubles if they don't have a grasp for local customs and tradition.
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, immigrant can be easily imposed on a severe punishment. As far as you know, local customs and traditions play an integral role in people's life in
host
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the host country
country
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 and they have been
gained
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gaining
 the special
respectation
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 by local people,
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, if you break the customs and traditions, it will be certainly disastrous and you will have to hold the heavy accountability for it.
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, in Singapore, you have to pay a lot of money if you litter or chew gum in public area.
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, you will annoy local people, lead to your isolation from society. You cannot adapt in a new
country
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 with new people if you don't get enthusiastically their customs and traditions, which make people feel furious. That means you are isolating yourself. In Viet Nam,
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, if you come to original people's house, you should be careful with fragile things like bowls or dishes, especially on the
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 day of the new month. It is a taboo when you break them whether accidentally or purposefully, because
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 will bring bad luck to host.
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, people will definitely obtain various benefits if they abide the customs and traditions of
host
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the host country
country
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.
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, you can live harmoniously with other people, you can get the
welcomming
becoming weaker
weakening
 of local people because they can see the constant
respectation
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 of you for the pristine beauty of their customs and traditions.
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, you can make a new friends, have a new relationship, and get the help of local people.
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, you will have the possibility to attend in traditional festivals as a native. They totally accept you because of your following and understanding their customs and traditions. In conclusion, people should follow the customs and traditions of a new
country
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 where they are going to
live
go away from a place
leave
 because it will help them a lot in a new life.
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