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People should follow the customs and tradition when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that the respectable customs and traditions should be pleasantly achieved the profound following and understanding from people who start to enter a new life in a completely new
country
. Personally, I absolutely agree with
this
 idea with no doubt. Imaginably, people will get a huge of troubles if they don't have a grasp for local customs and tradition.
Firstly
, immigrant can be easily imposed on a severe punishment. As far as you know, local customs and traditions play an integral role in people's life in
host
Suggestion
the host country
country
 and they have been
gained
Suggestion
gaining
 the special
respectation
 by local people,
therefore
, if you break the customs and traditions, it will be certainly disastrous and you will have to hold the heavy accountability for it.
For instance
, in Singapore, you have to pay a lot of money if you litter or chew gum in public area.
Secondly
, you will annoy local people, lead to your isolation from society. You cannot adapt in a new
country
 with new people if you don't get enthusiastically their customs and traditions, which make people feel furious. That means you are isolating yourself. In Viet Nam,
for example
, if you come to original people's house, you should be careful with fragile things like bowls or dishes, especially on the
first
 day of the new month. It is a taboo when you break them whether accidentally or purposefully, because
this
 will bring bad luck to host.
On the other hand
, people will definitely obtain various benefits if they abide the customs and traditions of
host
Suggestion
the host country
country
.
Firstly
, you can live harmoniously with other people, you can get the
welcomming
becoming weaker
weakening
 of local people because they can see the constant
respectation
 of you for the pristine beauty of their customs and traditions.
Thus
, you can make a new friends, have a new relationship, and get the help of local people.
Secondly
, you will have the possibility to attend in traditional festivals as a native. They totally accept you because of your following and understanding their customs and traditions. In conclusion, people should follow the customs and traditions of a new
country
 where they are going to
live
go away from a place
leave
 because it will help them a lot in a new life.
Submitted by Trang Nguyễn on

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