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Since most information about culture and history can be found on the Internet, some feel that museums are not needed any more. To what extent to you agree?

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Nowadays, human beings live in a
culture
 where technology has influenced everything. So, some people think that museums will not play an important part in
future
Suggestion
the future
 as we can find all facts that we want to know from google.
Although
 the
internet
 can provide information about
culture
Suggestion
the culture
 and history of a nation, I think, museums are the only place where collections of the country’s finest attractions like historical items and works of arts are exhibited. One main point is that no one can physically see
artifacts
a man-made object taken as a whole
artefacts
 on the
internet
 where only photos can be available and some may be restricted. If we want to know about a nation’s age old
culture
, museums are worth place to visit because historical things of past eras are displayed inside them. Galleries are
also
 the
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 for students’ creative learning as they engage deeper and better understanding of the current and past situations.
On the other hand
, people can’t find the facts they want to know quickly and easily the way they search on the
internet
 as museums do not open all
days
Suggestion
day
 and those are inconvenient for people who live far from that
areas
Suggestion
area
. Nowadays, people have to pay entrance fees, income for the government, if they want to visit the exhibition halls. Due to
those
plural of "this"
these
 facts, google learning saves both time and money for us. In conclusion, museums play an important role for people in teaching
culture
, history, science and social education. Information on the
internet
 can sometimes be virus for us as there are a lot of unofficial sites. So, I strongly
disagree the above
Suggestion
disagree with the above
 statement.
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