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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree

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The delinquency
rate
 nowadays is declining as compared to an old days due to the advancement in the
technology
, and I agree with
this
 statement, the usage of new devices
such
 as CCTV camera, and the real-time tracking, can control and resolve crimes, On the one hand, back in
days
Suggestion
the days
, the crime
rate
 was very high as the authorities find it difficult to control the misdeeds done by the people, as the police were unable to find concrete evidence against the offenders.
For instance
, if a person is over speeding a car, it was very difficult to provide evidence in the court without the help of
technology
, and people get away with
this
 without being penalized and
continuously
seemingly without interruption
continually
 repeating these types of
offenses
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offences
.
On the other hand
, and I agree with the fact that due to new
technology
 if a person does something which is an offense in the state can be tracked easily,
for example
, if a person breaks traffic signal can easily be caught in the CCTV footage and police do not need to be there physically as they can watch the footage from control rooms and take necessary action against the offender:
Moreover
, If someone commits murder and denied about it and said he or she was not there when
this
 happened can easily be traced by the tracker with the exact time.
Furthermore
, it becomes very difficult for
the people to manipulate
Suggestion
people to manipulate the
technology
, and
this
 results in a reduction in the crime
rate
 as compared to yesteryears. In conclusion, with the help of the latest
technology
rate
 of crime is decreased as
technology
 help authorities to find evidence, people starting to follow rules.
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