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Space exploration costs tax payers an exorbitant amount of money each year. What are the advantages and disadvantages of spending money on space exploration?

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The enormous amount of money paid by taxpayers each year for
space
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exploration
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. Better communication systems and a vast amount of Television channels are the benefits of
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exploration
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, there are
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 drawbacks to be taken into account. On the one hand, there are
number
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a number
 of advantages of
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, it helps to create an effective communication system,
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, Industries and Companies that expending their businesses in different countries requires a better communication system which is not possible without the help of outer
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exploration
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, the possibilities of having multifarious Television channels are due to the
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 of
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. If there were no outer
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 of
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, there would be no television channels.
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, with the help of
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 we can take a
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 tour in the near future, which is a great achievement by the astronauts.
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, one problem of having a
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the danger that it
 brings for the astronauts, over the past 50 years more than 20 astronauts loss their life in the efforts of reaching to the outer side of the planet. Another issue is that there are over half a million items of trash from over 50 years of
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 travel and satellite placement which orbit our planet from the past 50 years, which is extremely dangerous and
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 even a slight impact can have a deadly result. In conclusion, while there are several benefits of
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exploration
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. It can
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 be dangerous for astronauts reaching
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, as there are too many
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 trash present in the outer part of our planet which is life-threatening.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exorbitant
  • tax payers
  • technological advancement
  • scientific knowledge
  • economic growth
  • national prestige
  • long-term survival
  • financial investment
  • pressing needs
  • risk to human life
  • environmental concerns
  • space debris
  • immediate returns
  • allocation of resources
  • aerospace
  • engineering
  • habitable planets
  • breakthroughs
  • fuel industries
  • inspire
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