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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in life?

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Few people do not succeed in education, but end up being bloomed in
life
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. One of the main reasons is that they have a creative
mind
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, lack of attention in the studies failing in school. One of the most important things to achieve in
life
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 is Peace.
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, few people do not have a blooming time in school, but they became successful in
life
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, in my point of view one of the major reason behind
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 is a creative
mind
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, creative people usually do not find success in school-
life
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, they do not pay enough attention to their studies,
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, people like Bill Gates, Steve Jobs, they both failed in education but find a flourishing career in their
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 which
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 impact our lifestyles. Another main reason is that students find it difficult to bone up, and they end up being
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, the majority of the students have a problem in remembering too many answers. Even though there are many necessary things that we need in order to get a successful
life
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, but the most important ingredient to be ahead of everyone is a peace of
mind
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, no matter what your profession is whether you are a plumber, a doctor, an engineer, if you do not have a calm
mind
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, you will not find success in your
life
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.
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, calmness helps you to be more focused, motivated, it
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 helps your body to relax. There is an old saying that health is wealth, good health is not possible without peace in
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. In conclusion, to get a flourished
life
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people
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person
 should have a creative
mind
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 as well as a focused, and peaceful
mind
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.
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