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Some people believe that residents are responsible for the place where they live to be clean and tidy. Others believes that government is responsible for it. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

#people #residents #place #government
One part of the society
consider
Suggestion
considers
 citizens of a place to look after for its cleanliness.
However
, others endorse incumbent
government
 to be responsible for. I strongly advocate that it should be a combined effort of both
government
 bodies and local residents. Needless to say, administration is held responsible for the management of
collective
Suggestion
the collective waste dump
a collective waste dump
collective waste dumps
waste
 dump by the residents as sorting out a gigantic litter pile is not a cup of tea for individuals alone.
Besides
, higher authorities can
also
 strive to enact stringent laws regarding the
waste
 thrown by people individually. Levying of high rated taxes by
municipal Corporation
Suggestion
the municipal Corporation
 can
also
 be proved as a viable method to dwindle the rubbish. To exemplify, Telangana
government
 in India started imposing Penalty on the people who are found culprit for contaminating roads.
However
,
denizens
Suggestion
Denizens
denizens'
denizen's
 should
also
 to be blamed for the tidiness of their society since around 80% of the garbage is collected from house bins.
Moreover
, youngsters get themselves amused
bt
Used in specifying adjacent dimensions
by
 throwing parties and produce
waste
 food and other material. If hoteliers take responsibility to hygiene their places after
parties
Accept comma addition
parties, then
then
 how the young people will understand their duty? So, to teach them the value of beautiful nature, it is necessary for parents to make them responsible for their surroundings. To conclude, though
government
Suggestion
the government
 should take responsibility for the large
waste
 thrown outskirts of the city from financial Perspective but I believe local residents should
also
 need to nurture the environment by getting some time from their daily regime to clean the area.
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