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Some believe that we should invent a new language for international communication. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, there is a spread belief among people that the creation of a new universal
language
 can be beneficial for people all over the world. In my opinion, even if
this
 idea has its upsides it can cause much more harm to the society. The main drawback of creation of new
language
 lies in its irreversible consequences, as it can lead to elimination of indigenous languages. The importance of all existing languages is in its cultural heritage, because through the diversity of languages people have been passing on its traditions and values to future generations for the centuries.
As a result
, when there is one
language
 that people from all over the world know, it will make a dilemma for people in the future whether to learn and speak the
language
 used only in their homeland or to start using universal
language
 which gives a chance of breaking a barrier between various nationalities.
Moreover
, it can create a great number of protests among different nationalities which strongly appreciate their own
language
.
For instance
, even today in some countries the citizens
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are
 likely to ignore foreigners who try to communicate with them in English, because they are sure that if they visit
this
 country they should speak at least some of national
language
.
On the other hand
, the invention of an international
language
 can ease communication for all people. Today there are a few widespread languages, they are English, Spanish, Russian, and Chinees. But even obtaining three of these languages doesn’t guarantee that the person will not face difficulties when visiting country which’s national
language
,
for example
, is Hindi, because the prevailing part of people in
this
 country don’t know any of those languages due to a low-level of education. In that case, the existence of a universal
language
 will make
its
the thing named or in question
it
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known
 widespread reducing the chance putting up a
language
 barrier. To sum up, I believe, that despite the fact that the creation of international
language
 provides a substantial advantage for interaction of all people, it will take a heavy toll on our cultural heritage which can create a big conflict between people.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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