Each society has its homeless people. Some people believe that the best way to help them is to give them money. Do you agree or disagree?

#society #people #money

The World is full of people, that’s why it

also

brimful with

unjustice

an unjust act

injustice

. When someone can’t get enough

money

or not able to,

then

they are having hard times to stay alive. Homeless people are exist in the each corner of the World. Of

course there

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course, there

are some lavish people

try

Suggestion

trying

to help them with

money

, food or anything that they need. But when you think about it, can we help them only with the

money

However we

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However, we

don’t know their

backgrounds

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backgrounds, then

then

we don’t know what will happen to them when we give them

money

. They are two or more options that could happen when we give

money

to someone homeless: 1.They may spend the

money

something harmful (alcohol, drug) and just so

that is

their

chioce

the person or thing chosen or selected

choice

. 2. Someone

may stole

Suggestion

may steal

/take their

money

. Giving the competent food may be ample.

Forwhy

Suggestion

For why

they just need to stay alive and live their lives.

Hence I

Accept comma addition

Hence, I

suppose to give food to homeless people.

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