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Each society has its homeless people. Some people believe that the best way to help them is to give them money. Do you agree or disagree?

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The World is full of people, that’s why it
also
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 brimful with
unjustice
an unjust act
injustice
. When someone can’t get enough
money
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 or not able to,
then
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 they are having hard times to stay alive. Homeless people are exist in the each corner of the World. Of
course there
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course, there
 are some lavish people
try
Suggestion
trying
 to help them with
money
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, food or anything that they need. But when you think about it, can we help them only with the
money
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?
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However we
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However, we
 don’t know their
backgrounds
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backgrounds, then
then
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 we don’t know what will happen to them when we give them
money
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. They are two or more options that could happen when we give
money
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 to someone homeless: 1.They may spend the
money
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 something harmful (alcohol, drug) and just so
that is
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 their
chioce
the person or thing chosen or selected
choice
. 2. Someone
may stole
Suggestion
may steal
/take their
money
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. Giving the competent food may be ample.
Forwhy
Suggestion
For why
 they just need to stay alive and live their lives.
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Hence I
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Hence, I
 suppose to give food to homeless people.
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