Each society has its homeless people. Some people believe that the best way to help them is to give them money. Do you agree or disagree?

The World is full of people, that’s why it
also
brimful with
unjustice
an unjust act
injustice
. When someone can’t get enough
money
or not able to,
then
they are having hard times to stay alive. Homeless people are exist in the each corner of the World. Of
course there
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course, there
are some lavish people
try
Suggestion
trying
to help them with
money
, food or anything that they need. But when you think about it, can we help them only with the
money
?
However we
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However, we
don’t know their
backgrounds
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backgrounds, then
then
we don’t know what will happen to them when we give them
money
. They are two or more options that could happen when we give
money
to someone homeless: 1.They may spend the
money
something harmful (alcohol, drug) and just so
that is
their
chioce
the person or thing chosen or selected
choice
. 2. Someone
may stole
Suggestion
may steal
/take their
money
. Giving the competent food may be ample.
Forwhy
Suggestion
For why
they just need to stay alive and live their lives.
Hence I
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Hence, I
suppose to give food to homeless people.
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