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Agree or disagree: The numbers of people who are shopping online has been growing.

I agree on the fact that the number of online consumers is growing due to the efficiency of the service. Here are the relevant reasons. Shopping online saves a lot of the customer's money. Since the buyer purchases products online, he has no need of spending money on transportation to go to a specific place to buy things. Purchasing via
internet
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the internet
 does not require a lot of the customer's time. Going directly to a shopping mall and waiting in lines necessitates a great amount of the buyer's time. In
conlcusion I
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conclusion, I
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 say that shopping online is more efficient that buying directly, because it does not ‘steal’ lots of resources from the customers.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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