As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

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The advancement of technology has made individual buying

car

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is much more common than ever. Owning a personal

transportation

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has

bought

take something or somebody with oneself somewhere

brought

many

benefit

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benefits

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for

us, but meanwhile it

has causes

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causes

is caused

has caused

caused

was caused

negative effect

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a negative effect

on the

environment

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. In my opinion, I personally think that the benefit of it has outweighed the disadvantages.

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, it is noticeable that the improvement of technology has made the cost of building a

vehicle

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much

more lower

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lower

than ever.

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, buying

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individual

transportation

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is much more

affortable

that you have the financial means for

affordable

. Most of the people would choose to own a

vehicle

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is because it is less

time

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consuming and much more convenient. Compare to public transport, there could be many

uncertenties

being unsettled or in doubt or dependent on chance

uncertainties

such

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as delay due to

mechanical problem

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mechanical problems

a mechanical problem

and many others

factor

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factors

. We can travel to wherever we want at any

time

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immediately by using

personal

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a personal vehicle

personal vehicles

vehicle

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Futhermore

in addition

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, our

time

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would not be restricted by any timetable of

pubilc

not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole

public

transportation

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, it is much more freedom as we can plan our departure

time

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we prefer by using our own transport.

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, the more people who own their

vehicle

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the more carbon dioxide will be released.

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, the global warming of

earth

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the earth

will get more serious. The

environment

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that we live

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will be destructed and all the

live

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livers

life

of livings being on earth will be

treatened

(of flora or fauna) likely in the near future to become endangered

threatened

returned

retained

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problem is highly concerned by related authorities of all around the world and has taken action on it. There are

car

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makers who has developed

electrical

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electric

car

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and hybrid

car

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, both of these inventions will reduce the release of carbon dioxide. These inventions can be beneficial for both parties at the same

time

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, by owning a

vehicle

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and preserve the

environment

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. In conclusion, it is not wrong to buy a personal

car

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as it can bring many advantages to individuals. Meanwhile, we should

also

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protect the

environment

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as it is crucial to us. We should avoid any unnecessary driving,

such

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as share our ride with others or take public

transportation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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330 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

personal mobility
convenience
commuting
quality of life
personalized space
carbon emissions
global warming
air pollution
traffic congestion
environmental degradation
resource depletion
electric vehicles
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As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

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