As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

The advancement of technology has made individual buying
car
is much more common than ever. Owning a personal
transportation
has
bought
take something or somebody with oneself somewhere
brought
many
benefit
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benefits
to
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for
us, but meanwhile it
has causes
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causes
is caused
has caused
caused
was caused
negative effect
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a negative effect
on the
environment
. In my opinion, I personally think that the benefit of it has outweighed the disadvantages.
Firstly
, it is noticeable that the improvement of technology has made the cost of building a
vehicle
much
more lower
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lower
than ever.
Therefore
, buying
a
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an
individual
transportation
is much more
affortable
that you have the financial means for
affordable
. Most of the people would choose to own a
vehicle
is because it is less
time
consuming and much more convenient. Compare to public transport, there could be many
uncertenties
being unsettled or in doubt or dependent on chance
uncertainties
such
as delay due to
mechanical problem
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mechanical problems
a mechanical problem
and many others
factor
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factors
. We can travel to wherever we want at any
time
immediately by using
personal
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a personal vehicle
personal vehicles
vehicle
.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, our
time
would not be restricted by any timetable of
pubilc
not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole
public
transportation
, it is much more freedom as we can plan our departure
time
we prefer by using our own transport.
On the contrary
, the more people who own their
vehicle
the more carbon dioxide will be released.
As a result
, the global warming of
earth
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the earth
will get more serious. The
environment
that we live
by
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in
will be destructed and all the
live
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livers
life
of livings being on earth will be
treatened
(of flora or fauna) likely in the near future to become endangered
threatened
returned
retained
.
This
problem is highly concerned by related authorities of all around the world and has taken action on it. There are
car
makers who has developed
electrical
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electric
car
and hybrid
car
, both of these inventions will reduce the release of carbon dioxide. These inventions can be beneficial for both parties at the same
time
, by owning a
vehicle
and preserve the
environment
. In conclusion, it is not wrong to buy a personal
car
as it can bring many advantages to individuals. Meanwhile, we should
also
protect the
environment
as it is crucial to us. We should avoid any unnecessary driving,
such
as share our ride with others or take public
transportation
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal mobility
  • convenience
  • commuting
  • quality of life
  • personalized space
  • carbon emissions
  • global warming
  • air pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental degradation
  • resource depletion
  • electric vehicles
  • carpooling
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