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As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their own cars. Do the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

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The advancement of technology has made individual buying
car
 is much more common than ever. Owning a personal
transportation
 has
bought
take something or somebody with oneself somewhere
brought
 many
benefit
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benefits
to
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for
 us, but meanwhile it
has causes
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causes
is caused
has caused
caused
was caused
negative effect
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a negative effect
 on the
environment
. In my opinion, I personally think that the benefit of it has outweighed the disadvantages.
Firstly
, it is noticeable that the improvement of technology has made the cost of building a
vehicle
 much
more lower
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lower
 than ever.
Therefore
, buying
a
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an
 individual
transportation
 is much more
affortable
that you have the financial means for
affordable
. Most of the people would choose to own a
vehicle
 is because it is less
time
 consuming and much more convenient. Compare to public transport, there could be many
uncertenties
being unsettled or in doubt or dependent on chance
uncertainties
such
 as delay due to
mechanical problem
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mechanical problems
a mechanical problem
 and many others
factor
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factors
. We can travel to wherever we want at any
time
 immediately by using
personal
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a personal vehicle
personal vehicles
vehicle
.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, our
time
 would not be restricted by any timetable of
pubilc
not private; open to or concerning the people as a whole
public
transportation
, it is much more freedom as we can plan our departure
time
 we prefer by using our own transport.
On the contrary
, the more people who own their
vehicle
 the more carbon dioxide will be released.
As a result
, the global warming of
earth
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the earth
 will get more serious. The
environment
 that we live
by
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in
 will be destructed and all the
live
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livers
life
 of livings being on earth will be
treatened
(of flora or fauna) likely in the near future to become endangered
threatened
returned
retained
.
This
 problem is highly concerned by related authorities of all around the world and has taken action on it. There are
car
 makers who has developed
electrical
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electric
car
 and hybrid
car
, both of these inventions will reduce the release of carbon dioxide. These inventions can be beneficial for both parties at the same
time
, by owning a
vehicle
 and preserve the
environment
. In conclusion, it is not wrong to buy a personal
car
 as it can bring many advantages to individuals. Meanwhile, we should
also
 protect the
environment
 as it is crucial to us. We should avoid any unnecessary driving,
such
 as share our ride with others or take public
transportation
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal mobility
  • convenience
  • commuting
  • quality of life
  • personalized space
  • carbon emissions
  • global warming
  • air pollution
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental degradation
  • resource depletion
  • electric vehicles
  • carpooling
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