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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is, therefore, necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In a few states, health issues associated with eating too much junk
food
 are on
rise
Suggestion
the rise
 and
therefore
, the government must levy high tariffs on
this
 type of
food
 as in
this
 way prices will be high and consumption will go down and
secondly
 people will adopt healthy eating habits.
This
 essay agrees with the statement and gives details about it.
To begin
 with, the correct way to prevent the masses from consuming fast
food
 like Pizzas, burgers, and fizzy drinks is to impose a duty on these items. After taxes, the prices of
such
 items will increase and people will face difficulty in buying them and their consumption will automatically decrease.
However
, there are people from a good income group who can manage to afford junk
food
 easily and they are ready to pay a toll. The revenue generated from fast-
food
 chains can be used for the healthy purpose of the nation and in public service messages to create awareness among people.
For example
: in Pakistan, the use of tobacco has been reduced drastically due to heavy tax on it and the earnings from the duty have been used in health issues related to smoking
such
 as lung cancer and mouth cancer.
Furthermore
, the increase in the cost of cafeteria
food
 will avert people to not to have it daily and eat it occasionally. There will be less harmful effects and people will slowly and gradually start developing a healthy habit of eating fruits and vegetables, which are far less expensive than greasy and fatty
food
. Organic
food
 should be encouraged to live a refreshing life, but as it is considered as a luxury product it is out of reach to the masses. In conclusion, the government should impose a high tariff on the fast-
food
 industry as it will increase its prices and people will not be able to buy them and they will start eating healthy
food
. Tax will help nations to generate more revenue, which can be used for health and safety purposes.
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