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Write a letter to a travel agent expressing your dissatisfaction with their facilities due to a problem you had on a holiday.

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Dear Sir, I would like to bring the matter of
low quality
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low-quality
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 travelling services about your company “Classic Cruise”, I recently went on the trip. I travelled
on
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to
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 Elizabeth 201, from 1st to 7th April, and I
shocked
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was shocked
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 by not only the standard of accommodation
,
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 but
also
 the quality of the food.
To begin
 with, the size and condition of my room disgusted me as it was tiny and filthy unlike “Deluxe cabins” the advertisement of your promises.
Moreover
, I did not
provided
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with
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my personal washroom
instead
 of asking for a private washroom in
room
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the room
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;
hence
, I had to use the common facility – which bothered me all the time. What is more, the flavour of
food
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the food
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 was so abominable that I got a digestive problem on
third
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 day;
although
,
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 your advertisement promised of
five star
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five-star
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 restaurants and ambrosial in taste, the food was in fact of very poor quality. I feel
,
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 I am entitled to get
full
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a full
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 refund for the cost of the cruise and a written apology for the misinformation you advertised
on
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in
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newspaper
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. I look forward to hearing from you regarding
this
 matter as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Ryan
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