IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

Some people think that big sporting events are not worthwhile for the host country. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #events #host #country
The past several decades have witnessed the dramatic development of international athletics events which has been prevailing globally and enjoying a wide range of fans.
However some
Accept comma addition
However, some
 people think that the government should focus on domestic economy or social issues rather than spend a huge amount on hosting international competition. As far as I am concerned, I can only disagree with the statement and the reasons are given below.
First
 and foremost, hosting a grand international events,
such
 Olympics, Universiade, and the World Cup, can attract many people around the globe to participate in the competitive sports. So, conducting a big sport event means a wonderful chance to exhibit a country’s culture and development to the world. By doing
this
, the hosting country can improve the image and gain positive reputation.
Therefore
, its international influence
can be widen
Suggestion
can widen
 and deepened.
On the other hand
, these well-known events can bring about an array of economic benefits. To take an example, the hosting authority has to invest
this
 project at least two or three years for stadiums or gyms, which may boost the local economy
growth
Suggestion
grow
. In reality, putting money in sport facilities can not only increase job vacancies at local community, but
also
 promote other fields, including tourism and hospitality industry. Based on the above discussion, holding international sporting events, a win- win strategy, can not only enhance a nation’s economic power and global influence, but
also
 but
also
 solid its national recognition, which can stimulate civilians’ sense of responsibility and cooperation to face
further
 challenges in the future.
Submitted by 李瑞庭 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: