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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are become more isolated. Discuss both sides & give your opinion

#people #internet #communities
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It is observed by many, the invention of
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internet
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the internet
 is boon to connect the whole universe, and now folks are able to communicate to those people who are sitting either at the end of the globe. On the flip side, society feels communities are ending owing to the
internet
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 which is creating a huge gap between individuals as they prefer to stay online on social media rather than physical meetings to people around their place. I firmly believe
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internet
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the internet
 has made our life easier and approachable,
otherwise
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 we can never find the world so small. One the one side,
firstly
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, people are able to trade through video conferencing the reason behind is
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internet which
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the internet, which
the internet which
 has removed the need to visit to the premises of the vendor to check the product to make the final decision of purchase.
Secondly
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, plenty of information is available on the sites which pupils can easily view, download and share with their batch-mates or colleagues.
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, meetings and assignments can hold even at their own convenient places, the requirement is only device and good range of
internet
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.
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, it becomes quite convenient for today’s people to get popularity on
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internet
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the internet
 by showing their skills and talent, the reason is
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internet which
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the internet, which
the internet which
 is having number of applications
that is
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 provide a better platform to the whole world along with viewers can praise and appreciate from the whole globe. On the other side, children do not initiate to step out of the house and roll off their eyes and hands from the devices;
this
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 routine is detrimental not only for the mental growth but
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 for their physical growth.
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, people are avoiding society meetings or seminars,
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 communities are ending as people browse to the
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 rather than to approach to their elders or superior who are having practical experience which is crucial for their age.
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, teenagers are happy to eat in a room rather than a sharing dining table with family or friends. In a nutshell,
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internet
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the internet
 has removed hundreds of barriers, but it has
also
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 affected the physical meetings, people are more socialized over the
internet
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. I support for the usage of
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internet
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the internet
 because it is doing our daily routine so lively and has raised the standard of living of human being.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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