Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Discuss the both positive and negative effects of adventures on people life with examples from your personal

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.Undoubtedly, physical games are the future of fitness of a person as prosperity.

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it is widely considered to impress the public towards the

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some hazardous affecting on a player.

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i am unconvinced with the loses that the sports have more positive benefits than negative.

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with, the sport is a backbone of an individual’s health, which drives the whole body to remain in moveable position.

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, the dangerous physical movement of a all the parts,

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as attempt to jump from a certain height, running at a very speedy rate, these help a blood to circulate properly throughout the body along with boost fitness.

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in 2008 The FIFA World cup, a player was hit

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r by a throw-ball with an opposite team, yet he could not get even hurt and medical reported showed the function of

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, the practical exercises enhance all parts of a man to work

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it has numerous drawbacks that may push a human almost close to death.

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t, it will likely to damaging his leg or any essential bone, which cannot be replaced,

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as joint of the leg, or hip bone. A major example is professional of the Pakistan Cricket team an Ahmed Shahzad, who was hit by a ball on his neck in the world cup 2017 in Australia and was hospitalized.

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, the accidents caused while playing a game may probably be hazardous in some situations. In conclusion, having the arguments for both the views. I strongly believe that the sports are the key to maintain the health of a member of

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