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Rich countries should not employ skilled labor from poor countries, as poor countries need the workers more. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that wealthy
nations
 should not hire professional employees from poor
nations
due to
 the needs of the workers in poorer
nations
 are higher. Despite the objection to hiring those people, I think that employing them will give people from poor
countries
 more chances to succeed and well-paid jobs. There is compelling evidence that labourers who
work
 in good environments will have more chances to be promoted in careers, especially skilled .
This
also
 means when working in wealthy
countries
 that have rich resources in different jobs, their proportion of success will increase.
This
 is not only seen in various
nations
 but
also
 in different areas of a country,
for example
, in VietNam, people from the countryside usually prefer to
work
 in Ho Chi Minh City the centre of finance to enhance their careers.
Thus
, a good environment affects a lot of success in people’s lives.
Moreover
, working in rich
countries
 enables citizens from developing
countries
 to have high salaries. That owing to developed
countries
 are willing to pay large amounts of money to employ gifted labourers who can help them improve their
countries
.
For instance
, some professional Vietnamese staff are invited to
work
 abroad in the US.
As a consequence
, their income is much higher than workers in VietNam.
To sum up
, employees from poorer
countries
 should
work
 in rich
countries
due to
 its benefits for both individuals and society.
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task achievement
To enhance the task achievement, consider addressing possible counterarguments or opposing viewpoints and refuting them effectively. This will demonstrate a comprehensive understanding of the issue and add depth to the argument.
coherence cohesion
Improve coherence and cohesion by ensuring smooth transitions between paragraphs and ideas. Additionally, avoid redundancy, such as by not repeating the point about high salaries without adding further value.
task achievement
The essay successfully presents a clear position on the topic and supports it with relevant arguments.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion effectively frame the argument, providing a logical start and finish to the essay.
task achievement
Specific examples, such as the situation in VietNam and Vietnamese workers being invited to the US, enhance the argument's credibility and relevance.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • brain drain
  • economic development
  • skilled labor
  • annexation of talent
  • public services
  • investment in training
  • ethical considerations
  • global equity
  • temporary migration
  • bilateral agreements
  • human resources
  • technological advancements
  • healthcare and education sectors
  • global inequalities
  • responsibility
  • migratory policies
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