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In some countries today, there is an attitude that anyone can do it in the arts-music, literature, acting, art, etc. As a result, people with no talent become rich and famous and genuine talent is not valued or appreciated. Do you agree or disagree?

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To start with, people who were born without any talent, can gain popularity extremely
quick
Suggestion
quickly
 and their fame fades away after a short period of time compared to the gifted ones. What is more, social media platforms,
such
 as Instagram, Facebook, TikTok and YouTube are greater opportunities to become rich and it does not take a long time for
influencers
 to reach a significant number of followers.
For instance
, a few years ago one incredibly beautiful Lithuanian girl who was not a professional singer and her voice skills were average, posted a video on
instagram
 and suddenly became popular.
However
, nobody remembers her name now.
Furthermore
, natural-born genius has always been admired and appreciated. There are a lot of extra-ordinary actors, singers, dancers, writers and other artists who are valued for their spectacular skills and people are always interested in them. Leonardo DiCaprio is
such
 a great example of the person, who has become famous and has received plenty of different prestigious awards
as a result
 of his gift. In a nutshell, I strongly believe that talented individuals are valued enough.
Moreover
, those who do not have any real talent are not well-remembered.
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