Some people think that the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as unemployed and homeless people. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays unemployed people have become a debatable
isssue
prepare and issue for public distribution or sale
issue
. Critic
defend
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defends
the idea that
high
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higher
authorities should look after jobless and starving humans. I strongly agree with
this
aforesaid statement.
This
essay will discuss both
side
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sides
of views before coming to a logical conclusion. On the one hand, the central reason why
high
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higher
authority should help people without shelter and
job
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a job
is twofold.
Firstly
,
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,
if
governement
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
governments
would
suport
give moral or psychological support, aid, or courage to
support
spot
them
,
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,
they will not indulge in
criminial
someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
criminal
activies
any specific behavior
activities
,
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,
which result in low rate of crime in the entire nation.
Secondy
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Secondly
Second
,
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,
sometime jobless
peole
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
feel that they are
burden
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a burden
on their
famiy
a social unit living together
family
members
,
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,
this
feeelings
the experiencing of affective and emotional states
feeling
may have
deterimental
(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury
detrimental
effects on their physical and mental well being
,
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,
government support can help them to stay physically fit.
As a result
,
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,
due to rising crime and job related stress on these people,
governement
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the government
government
should provide assistance.
On the other hand
,
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,
this
is not entirely
governement's responsibility
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the government's responsibility
government's responsibility
governments responsibility
to take care them. Because,
governemnet
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
have
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has
many other issues to deal with
such
a traffic congestion
,
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,
juvinile
of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people
juvenile
deliquency
nonpayment of a debt when due
delinquency
,
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,
uneducation
something that serves to indicate or suggest
indications
indication
induction
are few to mention.
Moreover
,
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,
individuals need to work
hard
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harder
rather than expecting
favour
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a favour
favours
from others in order to
fullfill
put in effect
fulfil
their basic needs. The government's assistance will discourage other hard working candidate to
achive
to gain with effort
achieve
their targets. To conclude, from aforementioned points, admittedly
goverment's
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government's
powers can lower
offences and
Accept comma addition
offences, and
help them to stay strong. But it can cause
deterimental
(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury
detrimental
effects on the tax payer's mind and struggling candidates. If
government
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the government
will support them
,
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,
many heated debates can be in
future
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the future
for sure.
Submitted by Yogesh Sharma on

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