Some people think that the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as unemployed and homeless people. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays unemployed people have become a debatable

isssue

prepare and issue for public distribution or sale

issue

. Critic

defend

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defends

the idea that

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higher

authorities should look after jobless and starving humans. I strongly agree with

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aforesaid statement.

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essay will discuss both

side

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sides

of views before coming to a logical conclusion. On the one hand, the central reason why

high

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higher

authority should help people without shelter and

job

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a job

is twofold.

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governement

the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

government

governments

would

suport

give moral or psychological support, aid, or courage to

support

spot

them

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they will not indulge in

criminial

someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime

criminal

activies

any specific behavior

activities

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which result in low rate of crime in the entire nation.

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Secondly

Second

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sometime jobless

peole

(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively

people

feel that they are

burden

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a burden

on their

famiy

a social unit living together

family

members

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this

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feeelings

the experiencing of affective and emotional states

feeling

may have

deterimental

(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury

detrimental

effects on their physical and mental well being

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government support can help them to stay physically fit.

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due to rising crime and job related stress on these people,

governement

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the government

government

should provide assistance.

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this

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is not entirely

governement's responsibility

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the government's responsibility

government's responsibility

governments responsibility

to take care them. Because,

governemnet

the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

government

have

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has

many other issues to deal with

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a traffic congestion

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juvinile

of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people

juvenile

deliquency

nonpayment of a debt when due

delinquency

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uneducation

something that serves to indicate or suggest

indications

indication

induction

are few to mention.

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individuals need to work

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harder

rather than expecting

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a favour

favours

from others in order to

fullfill

put in effect

fulfil

their basic needs. The government's assistance will discourage other hard working candidate to

achive

to gain with effort

achieve

their targets. To conclude, from aforementioned points, admittedly

goverment's

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government's

powers can lower

offences and

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offences, and

help them to stay strong. But it can cause

deterimental

(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury

detrimental

effects on the tax payer's mind and struggling candidates. If

government

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the government

will support them

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many heated debates can be in

future

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the future

for sure.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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238 words

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Fully explain your ideas

Some cities ban private cars from entering the centre and force people to use bicycles and buses. Do the advantages of this policy outweigh the disadvantages?

In some countries, owning a home rether than renting one is very important for people

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In many countries, people are not looking care of their elderly relatives but seeking help of professionals to look after them. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?