Some people think that the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as unemployed and homeless people. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays unemployed people have become a debatable

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defends

the idea that

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higher

authorities should look after jobless and starving humans. I strongly agree with

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aforesaid statement.

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sides

of views before coming to a logical conclusion. On the one hand, the central reason why

high

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higher

authority should help people without shelter and

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a job

is twofold.

Firstly

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governement

the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

government

governments

would

suport

give moral or psychological support, aid, or courage to

support

spot

them

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they will not indulge in

criminial

someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime

criminal

activies

any specific behavior

activities

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which result in low rate of crime in the entire nation.

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Secondly

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sometime jobless

peole

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people

feel that they are

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a burden

on their

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a social unit living together

family

members

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this

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the experiencing of affective and emotional states

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may have

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effects on their physical and mental well being

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government support can help them to stay physically fit.

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due to rising crime and job related stress on these people,

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the government

government

should provide assistance.

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this

is not entirely

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the government's responsibility

government's responsibility

governments responsibility

to take care them. Because,

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many other issues to deal with

such

a traffic congestion

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juvinile

of or relating to or characteristic of or appropriate for children or young people

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deliquency

nonpayment of a debt when due

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uneducation

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individuals need to work

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harder

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a favour

favours

from others in order to

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their basic needs. The government's assistance will discourage other hard working candidate to

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achieve

their targets. To conclude, from aforementioned points, admittedly

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government's

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offences, and

help them to stay strong. But it can cause

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the government

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many heated debates can be in

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the future

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