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Over time, as children grow older, the relationship they have with their parents changes. In your opinion, what role should parents have in their adult children’s lives? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Do Parents have a role to play in their children's
adult
 lives? In
this
 essay, I will discuss why parents are needed to provide guidance and support through decisions their children make as adults; as well as the financial assistance they can contribute to their children when in crisis. Parents can offer guidance and support to their children in their
adult
 lives. They can provide them with sound advice and point them in the right direction
on
Suggestion
in
 life-changing decisions
such
 as their jobs and marriage.
For example
, when the child is facing difficulties during their marriage as an
adult
, they tend to turn to someone else for advice. They can talk to their parents who have most likely experienced the same issue in the past.
Additionally
, parents can help their children secure a job once they have completed their studies in their own company or their friend's company.
Furthermore
, becoming an
adult
 means having responsibilities, which is not a 'walk in the park'. Their children may find themselves in situations where they are unemployed and in need of financial assistance for things like rent and bills, or to start a new business. Parents can assist their children in
such
 situations by lending them money to help them take care of their immediate expenses or to
startup
Suggestion
start up
 a company. To sum up, I believe that parents play a vital role in their children's adulthood as a guide through an awkward situation, and by assisting them financially when they are in a financial crisis.
Submitted by Hilda Penny on

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