People are surrounded by advertising, which has increasing effect on our lives. Do you think the positive effects of this outweigh the negative effects?

Nowadays
advertisement
have become
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has become
had become
a part of our
lives
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life
and it is
also
a powerful medium.
in
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In
my opinion positive effects of
this
outweigh the negative effects
To begin
with
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,
advertisement
provide
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provides
us with information on new product
.
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which
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Which
is
convienent
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
for potential consumers to know the price and function about
this
items
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item
they want to buy.The public
sevice
work done by one person or group that benefits another
service
advertisement
can
also
know
public's awarness
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the public's awareness
public's awareness
of some some problems and
enviornmental
of or relating to the external conditions or surroundings
environmental
protection
.
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.
It makes
people life
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a person's life
person's life
peoples' life
comfortable and they get
know
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to know
about latest and
better
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best
version of product and purchase
also
facilitate themselves.
For example
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,
Bata
have variety collection of
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has a varied collection of
has variety collection of
has varied collection of
have varied collection of
sandals for different age groups
,
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,
thus
giving consumers different choice to select from.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
without advertising
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,
we can not
undestand
know and comprehend the nature or meaning of
understand
the choices of the items.
Secondly
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advertising is a creative industry
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,
it
providing
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provides
is providing
job opportunities and income for many people.
without
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Without
advertising
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,
there would be
higher unemployment rate
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a higher unemployment rate
.
Moreover
,
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,
it plays an important role in the economy.
people
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People
demand products and
manufacturs
put together out of artificial or natural components or parts
manufactures
manufactured
manufacture
supply them.
Therefore
,
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,
advertisement
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the advertisement
an advertisement
have
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has
certain benefits for people. On
other hand
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the other hand
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,
the main
drowback
the quality of being a hindrance
drawback
drawbacks
of
advertisement
is
,
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,
it is
easly
with ease ('easy' is sometimes used informally for 'easily')
easily
influenced by everyone
especialy
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
specially
for children
.
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.
for
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For
instence
an occurrence of something
instance
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,
children put
prussure
the force applied to a unit area of surface; measured in pascals (SI unit) or in dynes (cgs unit)
pressure
on their parents to buy
themthings
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them things
and they may become violent.Another problem is that many
advertisement
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advertisements
manipulate people too badly and it always exaggerates the merits of
products
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the products
. In conclusion
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,
advertisement
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the advertisement
provid
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provides
provide
proved
both merits and demerits
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.
advantages
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Advantages
of
advertisement
is
,
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,
provide lack of information about product
,
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,
job
oppurtunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
opportunity
and
economy
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economic
development while
drowback
the quality of being a hindrance
drawback
drawbacks
is
,
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,
create
children
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child
violence
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,
badly affected health
.
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.
In my opinion
advertisement
provide more advantages than disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer behavior
  • purchasing decisions
  • impulsive buying
  • materialism
  • economic growth
  • competition and innovation
  • personal finances
  • information dissemination
  • misleading information
  • cultural norms
  • societal values
  • diversity
  • social causes
  • stereotypes
  • unrealistic standards
  • psychological effects
  • mental fatigue
  • stress
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