The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this trend can bring negative influences on the youths and the society. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Spending most of adolescent's
leisure
time
on shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
is increasingly popular. It is thought that
this
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
might ruin some positive aspects in the youth and the community. In my opinion, I completely agree with
this
claim, and I see that
leisure
time
should be exploited in more useful activities. Teenagers usually have
amount
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the amount
of free
time which
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time, which
is not existed in other elder people's life. Unfortunately, the majority of them waste those hours as they spend most of them in shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
. They hang out with their friends in malls and do shopping. They think that
this
is the best way to spend their spare
time
. It is believed that reading books is boring and even if they decided to read one, they would not be focused and they would not be able to reap benefits and brilliant ideas from them. The trend of shopping
in
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at
leisure
time
may bring negative influences on the adolescents and the society. But, what are they? It will be learnt that money has extremely small value. They will not appreciate it.
For instance
, when they buy everything they want without thinking deeply
of
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about
whether it is cheap or expensive, they learn that money has no value and they will grow up to be spoiled parents. They would not be able to accustom themselves to the conditions around them if there was not enough money.
Furthermore
, they might not know the importance of
time
. They will regret each
moment which
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moment, which
was spent on shopping and not exploited in a useful activity. With the above in mind, it is fairly concluded that
leisure
time
has a significant importance and a considerable value.
Thus
, youth should not waste it on
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
activities which will bring negative effects on the society.
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