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Many people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries,shops and public transport.Do you agree or disagree.

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In
this
 era mobile phones have an integral part of each person's life.Using phones ought to be, completely prohibited in public places is thought by numerous masses, like libraries, shops and public transport.
This
 essay will highlight that
this
 certainly is a rational approach that needs to be opted. To commence with using of smart phones is increasing day by day, especially in the places of public where sometime mishap pending because of it.Mostly multitudes operate their
phone
 with careless on the road.Unfortunately become victim of any situation.
Additionally
, almost all students or other person does not use their cell
phone
 in proper way and start to use social media and communicate to their close ones.
Besides
, when cellular phones are utilised by shopkeepers on shops that time they give more attention of the equipment
instead
 of giving their business.In short,
this
 gadget is not useful in public places.
Therefore
, folks argued that digital phones should be restricted to crowded places.There are many benefits of
this
 perspective.
Firstly
, teachers should not allow the students for using it.If students bring with them, they should be deposited so that they can easily focus on their studies.
Also
 a businessman needs to understand that work is
first
 from
phone
Suggestion
the phone
.So they should give attention on their business. Some rules can
also
 be made by the government regarding the use of the
phone
.On public transport
this
 equipment should be banned because most youngsters do the misuse of the mobile
phone
.
Consequently
, individuals will become less addicted of the
phone
. In the end,
although
 having mobile
phone
 has become need of everybody, but should be not too much.In
this
 way the
mishappening
 will be reduced and a person
also
 give focus on their goals.
Therefore
, it's a good thing if phones are disallowed.
Submitted by Rahul Grover on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Distraction
  • Etiquette
  • Tranquility
  • Prohibit
  • Intrusive
  • Courtesy
  • Essential communication
  • Public decorum
  • Designated areas
  • Safety concerns
  • Noise pollution
  • Digital etiquette
  • Enforcement measures
  • Civic responsibility
  • Silent mode
  • Connectivity
  • Invasiveness
  • Social norms
  • Policy implementation
  • Moderation
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