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In recent years, the has been immense advances in media in most aspects of people's lives, especially in a field of advertising. While some people argue that advertising is so popular that could not use it as way to sale, I could believe that it still plays an important role in trade.
to
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To
 begin with. It is undeniable fact that advertising worked as a primary method to connect between companies and clients as well as costumers. In fact, thanks to the breakthrough of technology and there are a vast number of users on social networking sites, advertisements could make people possible to receive new information about new- launched products or band new one.
Although
,
this
 form of sale only known as a
oneway
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one way
 information to consumers and there are no interactions to receptionists, most information which people need to know which normally contained in each advertisement.
Thus
, there are more and more ads occurring in the media, particularly in social networks, are a clear demonstration that advertising still remains as the most influence field in business Equally important, though, these have been increasing appearance new form of advertisement over the few years.
For instance
, in order to target to youngsters, companies could co-operate with celebrities as a brand ambassador who have a great influence on adolescent. By doing
this
, new products could be occurred in music videos or go with them in famous events.
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 a result, people could see products everywhere, no matter whether they want to see or not.
In other words
, it is easy to
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Advertisment
advertisement
people can not help but paying an attention on ads By way of conclusion,
although
 advertisment occur so much th
at people s
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the near future
eem to be saturated by it an have a fee
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sales
the sale
a sale
 that
this
 way would not useful anymore in near future, it still maintain as a key factor in sale
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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