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Some people believe that for a hobby to be enjoyable it should be hard to acquire or learn. Do you agree or disagree with this statement

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The
hobby
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 is for enjoyment purposes;
therefore
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, I believe acquired hobbies by anyone should be comfortable and
unstressful
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. I'm not convinced that
hobby
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 ought to be challenging because people are doing a
hobby
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 to relax;
therefore
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, it should be easy, convenient, enjoyable and affordable. The majority of people are working these days, and when they return home, they become exhausted and prefer to sleep and prepare for the
next
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 working day. The only
time
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 busy people can spare is probably the weekend;
therefore
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, to use
this
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time
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 productively, the
hobby
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 must be exciting and help recharge their batteries for the upcoming working week.
For example
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, listening to music, meeting with friends, and playing indoor games with children are among the most enjoyable and relaxing pass times for many people.
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, according to some people's
hobby
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 is a useless thing and a mere waste of
time
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. Much research has proven that relaxation is a crucial element to enhance one's productivity. When the body relaxes, it releases a 'happy chemical' which is exceptionally beneficial for physical and mental health.
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 acquired a
hobby
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also
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 depend upon the affordability. The people want to challenge themselves,
therefore
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, opted for challenging hobbies like photography, video making, etc. Many hobbies that are equipped with some challenges are expensive and hard to afford by many.
However
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that for challenging hobbies; one must have enough money to spend, and the majority of people from underdeveloped nations are still living below the poverty line cannot able to acquire any
hobby
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,
such
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 as from Pakistan, India, Sri
lanks
long and thin and often limp
lank
, and Bangladesh. Ultimately, I simply condemned the fact that hobbies should be challenging;
hence
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, I believe leisure
time
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 activities should be easily accessible and affordable for every human being.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of accomplishment
  • overcoming obstacles
  • gratifying
  • continuous source of enjoyment
  • relaxing activities
  • unwind and de-stress
  • counterproductive
  • mental break
  • subjective
  • personal preference
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