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Some people prefer to be self employed, whereas others like working for companies. Which is a better approach?

#people #self #companies #approach
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Numerous persons prefer to
work
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 in a
company
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 where s some like to open their own
business
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 and be
self
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 employed. In
this
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 essay we will discuss which is more significant. One of the main
advantage
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advantages
 of being
self
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 employed is that you are completely
self
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 reliant here. You are your own boss.Only you can take decisions.
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 can give you full freedom what ever you want to do. Nobody can command you mad nobody will interfere
in
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with
 your
work
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.
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, is there are no specified working hours.You can do
work
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 as per your own choice. There will be no
boundation
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 of working hours.
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,
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,
if you
work
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 for yourself, only you decide your salary.Your profits will be with you only.
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, there are advantages of working for companies.
First
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 of
all you
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all, you
 don't have to
do
engage in
make
 any type of investment. Your skills will improve time to time by
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company
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the company
. You will get additional benefits along with salary.
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, working for a
company
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also
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 signified your status symbol.
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Actually, I
 believe that we must
work
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 for
company
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 for
few years
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a few years
. After getting
experience we
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experience, we
 can become
self
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 employed person by starting own
business
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. There are ample of examples of successful
business
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 man who were doing petty jobs and
later in
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later, after
later after
 they establish
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business empire
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a business empire
 and become tycoons. Like Reliance. To conclude
,
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,
being
self
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 employed can be very fulfilling but not without difficulties, so working for a
company
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 would be a much safer option.
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