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sometimes spouses have to live far away from each other. maintaining a long distance relationship is sometimes difficult and straining. what do you think are the main reasons of long distance relationships?what can be done to help couples feel closer?

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Nowadays living long distances among spouses is becoming more and more common than it used to be decades or centuries ago. It is considered by some
people
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 that supporting
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 relationships may be
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,
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 and stressful.
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 essay will examine most causes of these associations between individuals and provide some possible solutions for feeling closer to each other. There are a lot of reasons why
people
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 have to live far from their spouses, but I would like to point out the main two of them:
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excellent job and education opportunities. As for a career, well-paid work often
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 individuals
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 an unpopular decision,
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 as
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 below-mentioned one. A salary, working conditions and
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 facilities,
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, a company car or flat,
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 crucial causes.
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, sometimes it is impossible to get a good education in
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 city or even their country,
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,
people
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 tend to study far from their home.
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, my mother studied abroad for 5 years since the universities
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overseas are more affordable and better than in Russia. My family could overcome
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 a hard period of time. Modern technologies help
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 manage
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 situations, not to feel alone and allow
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 be close to each other. Social networks,
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, Facebook or VK, and messengers
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 as Skype, We Chat and WhatsApp, provide individuals with,
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 possibility enabling them to call and look at their favourites. What is more, a person should try to spend with their family the most essential events: birthdays, New
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 and Christmas.
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, a good job and
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 education may lead to
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 situation when spouses have to live far from, but contemporary technologies can help them feel closer.

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task achievement
Consider expanding on your examples with more specific details or statistics, as this will enhance your argument and make your essay more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Use more transitional phrases to link your ideas and paragraphs. Words like 'furthermore,' 'likewise,' or 'on the other hand' can guide the reader through your arguments more smoothly.
task achievement
Your conclusion summarizes well, but it could be made stronger by restating the importance of the issue and/or suggesting a future solution.
coherence cohesion
Your essay's structure is clear, with a defined introduction, body, and conclusion, which aids in the logical flow of your arguments.
task achievement
You've identified two main reasons for long-distance relationships, which are relevant and insightful, capturing the main causes as per the essay question.
task achievement
The use of modern technology as a solution shows your ability to propose a practical resolution to the issue discussed.

Your opinion

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